Post by Merina on Dec 4, 2005 21:50:39 GMT -5
This is an RPG text forum. In this kind of forum the entire site is an RPG. Of which, its a giant story that is created by the characters. When a character posts, they will post it in a story 3rd point of view. Your job is to post in response to it, and how your character now interacts with that persons character, without of course controlling that person. Now to make a post.
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1) action, description, dialogue (thoughts), feeling
using these four will help fill up your post.
a)action- What are you doing. duh. instead of just saying what you are doing, add a little detail to it.
"Richard looked at the flower". this would be fine if someone was talking about the flower previously, which would assume you read the previous post.
but lets say you didn't.
the action of the sentence is quite boring. So lets make it better.
how was he looking at the flower. Lets say he was just looking at the flower for now particular reason, just kinda dozing off in his own world.
so add to the verb.
Ex: Richard Idly looked at the flower.
Now lets say he was just bored and looked around. so we ad
Richard Idly looked to his right and saw a flower.
now obviously as you can tell, there is the emotion of feeling in writing action. Why are you doing it?
b)Description- this can't be stressed enough. when you say "Richard looked at the flower", ask a couple of questions.
1)whats its look like and/or what does it perhaps smell
2)where is it? in a pot, in a flower bed.
so here is a flower, whats it look like.
"Richard looked at a slightly bent flower.
c) dialogue- what are you saying, what are you thinking
so again
Richard looked at the flower, then said,"hey, thats pretty", or perhaps a thought
Richard looked at the flower, then thought to himself,wow, thats a pretty flower.
d) feeling is needed the most. It gives your character a more realistic and, less boring quality. what is he like?
Is he hot tempered, shy, ignorant, foolish, etc.
a couple of Examples.
hot tempered. - Richard looked at the flower, and suddenly flared up in anger."What a stupid thing this flower is!!!" a bit over exaggerating, but you get my point.
shy- Richard glanced at the flower, trying not to make it obvious that he was looking at such a delicate object
ignorant- Richard looks at the flower, but he obviously doesn't know what it is, for no one has ever told him.
foolish- Richard saw something out of the corner of his eye, hoping it was something to eat, he turned his head with a wild grin, only for it to fade.... it was only a flower
so feeling or emotion is essential in a post.
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This was written by my awesomely awesome lady, whom being righteously the queen of Rurisk, Natulcien the great, gives a good example of what a post should be like
From what Mer has posted, we know that we need basically four things in a post to make a boring/ok post into an interesting/super post. I will take what Mer has started for us.
With only a flower and Richard.... what can we do to make an interesting post?
As Richard stood looking at the person in front of him, he saw something out of the corner of his eye. Hoping it was something to eat, he turned his head with a wild grin, only for it to fade.... it was only a flower.Well, so much for breakfast. He thought to himself as he turned back to face the person again. Scratching his chin , and laughing a bit foolishly he spoke, “Heh. Ummm... nice flowers you have here.” Trying to cover up his mistaking the flower for food, he looked away from the person and watched as some light clouds passed overhead.
Red= action
Green= thoughts
Beige= feelings
Purple= dialogue
The orginal page was by Slave Masters(slavex): slavex.proboards37.com/index.cgi
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1) action, description, dialogue (thoughts), feeling
using these four will help fill up your post.
a)action- What are you doing. duh. instead of just saying what you are doing, add a little detail to it.
"Richard looked at the flower". this would be fine if someone was talking about the flower previously, which would assume you read the previous post.
but lets say you didn't.
the action of the sentence is quite boring. So lets make it better.
how was he looking at the flower. Lets say he was just looking at the flower for now particular reason, just kinda dozing off in his own world.
so add to the verb.
Ex: Richard Idly looked at the flower.
Now lets say he was just bored and looked around. so we ad
Richard Idly looked to his right and saw a flower.
now obviously as you can tell, there is the emotion of feeling in writing action. Why are you doing it?
b)Description- this can't be stressed enough. when you say "Richard looked at the flower", ask a couple of questions.
1)whats its look like and/or what does it perhaps smell
2)where is it? in a pot, in a flower bed.
so here is a flower, whats it look like.
"Richard looked at a slightly bent flower.
c) dialogue- what are you saying, what are you thinking
so again
Richard looked at the flower, then said,"hey, thats pretty", or perhaps a thought
Richard looked at the flower, then thought to himself,wow, thats a pretty flower.
d) feeling is needed the most. It gives your character a more realistic and, less boring quality. what is he like?
Is he hot tempered, shy, ignorant, foolish, etc.
a couple of Examples.
hot tempered. - Richard looked at the flower, and suddenly flared up in anger."What a stupid thing this flower is!!!" a bit over exaggerating, but you get my point.
shy- Richard glanced at the flower, trying not to make it obvious that he was looking at such a delicate object
ignorant- Richard looks at the flower, but he obviously doesn't know what it is, for no one has ever told him.
foolish- Richard saw something out of the corner of his eye, hoping it was something to eat, he turned his head with a wild grin, only for it to fade.... it was only a flower
so feeling or emotion is essential in a post.
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This was written by my awesomely awesome lady, whom being righteously the queen of Rurisk, Natulcien the great, gives a good example of what a post should be like
From what Mer has posted, we know that we need basically four things in a post to make a boring/ok post into an interesting/super post. I will take what Mer has started for us.
With only a flower and Richard.... what can we do to make an interesting post?
As Richard stood looking at the person in front of him, he saw something out of the corner of his eye. Hoping it was something to eat, he turned his head with a wild grin, only for it to fade.... it was only a flower.Well, so much for breakfast. He thought to himself as he turned back to face the person again. Scratching his chin , and laughing a bit foolishly he spoke, “Heh. Ummm... nice flowers you have here.” Trying to cover up his mistaking the flower for food, he looked away from the person and watched as some light clouds passed overhead.
Red= action
Green= thoughts
Beige= feelings
Purple= dialogue
The orginal page was by Slave Masters(slavex): slavex.proboards37.com/index.cgi